18 December 2013

countdown to new year's: round 2, day 1

Countdown to New Year's: Round 2, Day 1
Welcome to Round 2 of the Our Lost Jungle Countdown to New Year’s! I apologize for the delay in the start of Round 2 dates … it’s a very hectic time, and there’s so much to get done! In part for that reason, I’ve decided that this round of dates will focus around the “commonplace” … or, rather, the common places. Get ready for dates in supermarkets, doctors’ offices, book stores, break rooms, and other such every day, seemingly mundane locales these poets will work to enliven by their mere presence! Don’t forget to case your votes for this round’s winners!

Romance in Aisle Four: Edward Markham VS John Donne 

Edward and John meet me outside the local supermarket, each already holding a little basket to help carry grocery treasures. I send John off to the deli department and steer Edward down the fruit aisle with me. As we walk and talk, Edward carefully picks up first one round, juice-filled clementine, then another, and carefully drops only the best ones into a small brown bag. As we walk and sniff at apples, peaches, and strawberries, Edward recites his poem “Cracks” for me.

The poem’s “pick up line”: “… how terrifying / To base your philosophy on anticipating surprise and accident!”
The most alluring word/phrase: “Then one morning …”
The most intriguing line break/enjambment: “… this can’t be replaced / As easily as shoes.”
The line that says “I love you”: “So what to do? You vow to take more care of the shoes.”
The perfect closing line for a date: “ … on reflection this is how things happen”

John returns from the deli with three stacks of freshly sliced cheeses and meats, pressing them carefully into the bottom of my basket. I shoo Edward off to the dairy section to snag eggs, milk, and other necessities while John and I head to the bakery. We marvel for a few minutes at the cakes and pies artfully decorated in their displays, and happily accept a few free samples. John helps me pick a few fresh loaves of bread, and we snag a few freshly made cannoli pastries. While we wait for Edward near the checkout line, John recites “An Anatomy of the World” as I pick out a beautiful bouquet of gerbera daisies.

The poem’s “pick up line”: “thou wast / Nothing but she, and her thou hast o’erpast.”
The most alluring word/phrase: “She’s now a part both of the choir, and song”
The most intriguing line break/enjambment: “Her death did wound and tame thee then, and then / Thou might’st have better spar’d the sun, or man.”
The line that says “I love you”: “She to whom this world must it self refer, / As suburbs or the microcosm of her”
The perfect closing line for a date: “Her name defin’d thee, gave thee form, and frame”

Clean up on Aisle Five! Which poet's work melted your heart?
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A “Grande” Gesture: Theodor Seuss VS Oliver Goldsmith 

Theodor and Oliver are already seated at the local Starbucks when I come bustling in. Oliver grins and offers me his seat, informing me that he will “patiently await his turn” at another table. Theodor offers to invest in something to drink for the two of us. I order a cold chocolate-laced drink and watch as the barista layers it with whipped cream and a caramel drizzle. We decide a grande iced water is probably best for the already bouncy Theodor. Even in the relative calm of the coffee cafĂ©, he finds ways to be whimsical. As he recites “Too Many Daves,” he uses everything from the water trace lines of an ice cube to some cream stolen from my drink to sugar snagged from a nearby table to draw several of his renamed Daves!

The poem’s “pick up line”: “Did I ever tell you …”
The most alluring word/phrase: “Zanzibar Buck-Buck McFate”
The most intriguing line break/enjambment: “McFate … / But she didn’t do it. And now it’s too late.”

The line that says “I love you”: And often she wishes that, when they were born, / She had named one of them Bodkin Van Horn”
The perfect closing line for a date: “But she didn’t do it. And now it’s too late.”

Oliver waits until Theodor slides from his seat to dispose of our cups to reclaim his spot. He has spent his time ordering us a nice little desert pastry, and suggests we move outside since the sun is out. We cast one last amused look at Theodor (he has somehow made his way behind the counter) as we head out into the cool, crisp air. Oliver points out the various shapes in clouds as they drift by overhead, and wonders at how we go so long in a day without looking up and around in wonder. We decide to sit and just do this for a bit, and after a few minutes I ask him to share his poem again. He recites “When Lovely Woman Stoops to Folly” with yet another mischievous grin on his face.

The poem’s “pick up line”: “wring his bosom”
The most alluring word/phrase: “wring his bosom”
The most intriguing line break/enjambment: “—is to die.”
The line that says “I love you”: “When lovely woman stoops to folly”
The perfect closing line for a date: “What art can wash her guilt away?”

Which poet put the double shot of love in your coffee?
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Your Turn: Once you have read each poet’s poem, I’d love for you to share your thoughts on why you voted for who you selected as the winner! Which lines, words, phrases, etc. stood out to you in each poet’s poem, and why? Don’t forget: sharing your vote in the comments earns you a drawing entry for the final book prize! 

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Relive Round One of the 2013 Our Lost Jungle Countdown to New Year's!:


  1. You know that the good Dr. shall win....

  2. Ah, what folly 'tween Doc Seuss and Goldsmith--
    "she didn't do it" or "wring his bosom"
    To pit Dave's mom 'gainst one"lovely woman"
    is sure to spark an OLJ poetic schism.

  3. For me, the choice between Markham and Donne was obvious...Markham's "Cracks" gets my vote. After placing the vote I was surprised to see that everyone else prefers Donne. Hmmmmm. Donne's was also nice but I sort of liked how Markham's states everything simplisticly and seems at first to be just a poem about shoes when really it about much more. Accessible but with depth.

    I had a hard time deciding between Suess and Goldsmith. I like Goldsmith's rhythm and rhyme but thorough enjoy the silliness of having too many Daves. At first I was going to make it a tie (and perhaps I should have) but didn't want to be indecisive. In the end, I decided to humor wins.


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